Thursday, 4 September 2014

The Haunted HouseTwisty trees cover my only exit. I’m cold, and the wind howls like a pack of wolfs. Out of the corner of my eye I glimpse a crumbling building.  I open the creaky door, there is a heater on so there must be a person in here but who? My lush blonde hair is covered in a thick layer of dust. I run to the door its stuck I pulled as hard as I could. “Hello a voice popped out, I can help you with that.”
 Oh sorry I didn’t mean to startle you, That’s my voice machine. His voice was loud and high, I thought to myself. Oh let me introduce myself: Hi I'm Caleb, oh and I'm Candiess and Ive run away.What did your dad do they're not that bad, yeah but my dads dead. Oh I'm so sorry to here that what did your mum do cause they're really bad yeah well my mums dead too. Who do you life with oh i live with my best friend and her parents, yeah and i am going to pick some berries for her, and i got lost.

A white blur covered the room. the red demon like teeth try to bite into my small body agh. he blunt eyes concurs my body I'm so scared: I fell like I'm in side a box. Hold on were did you go. 

agh i run out don't go says the ghost hey i recognise that voice its thats that squeaky boy pull that sheet of now. Okay but first do you want a cup of marriage i mean tea tea no you just said marriage yes i will yes i'm getting married.

Ten years latter: hey liz go get the washing in no mum Elizabeth now okay . hey caleb can we move into a house no honey we have to stay here because it is just right for you and me.   

The End.



  1. It's great to see you choosing interesting vocabulary and using language features in your writing. We need to work on editing your punctuation, and ideas for story endings.

  2. Hi Charlie, What an interesting story....I like how you begin - it really drew me in to want to read more. Where did you get your ideas? I would love to read more of your writing.